Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that with the extensive materials available on the Internet,
students
can learn by themselves at home, so schools are no longer essential. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement. I believed that self-study at home is not beneficial at all.
Firstly
, some
students
can not concentrate on
the
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study because of the
noise
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of
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their surrounding
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surrounding
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.
Secondly
,
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the
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don’t know how to use
these information
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in the right way. For
examples
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,
students
usually search for the answer
of
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maths,
although
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and although
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they don’t understand the answer, they still copy
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it.
In contrast
,
study
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at
schools
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are
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very necessary.
Students
can concentrate more on the lessons and not be worried about the surrounding.
In addition
, they are more independent and do not rely on the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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