IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

There are many inventions in human history, but some people think that the most important invention is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#inventions #history #people #invention #internet
Although
, few individuals argue that even though there are numerous developments in
people
's history but the invention of the
internet
 is the most crucial creativity around the world. I support
this
 to a great extent for several reasons.Whereas,
internet
 change the living patterns of the population,
although
, it has been encouraging
people
 to commit crimes. My position is argued
further
 with explanations. Out of the reasons, the foremost one is that the
internet
 makes
people
's life easy if we compared it with the past.
This
 is due to, nowadays, individuals can save time by completing their tasks from home through the
Internet
instead
 of going outside.
For example
, the masses can transfer money to any account without visiting a bank,
consequently
, they not only save their time but they
also
 save their cost of transportation. To add to
this
, now it become straightforward for societies to communicate with their friends and families from any corner of the globe.
However
, I would not overlook the other side too,
to begin
 with, due to easy access to the
Internet
 children spend quality time playing online games over the phone,
as a result
, the chance to come across the influence of criminals increases and they committed a crime to reach to a certain level in the game. To illustrate, recently, in India a juvenile stole money from his mother's bank account to get access to a game.
Furthermore
, the
internet
 encouragement to cybercrime in communities and cause tremendous effects on the masses' financial condition. To conclude the discussion, it can be
finally
 said that
although
 the fact of
internet
 invention makes it easy to survive worldwide for human beings, I believe that it
also
 rising the breach ratio in regions due to which
people
 become victims of cybercrime.
Submitted by gurmit.150 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: