It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

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that
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plays a vital role in many aspects of people’s life
such
as job
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,
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, and
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important
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of life. In my point of view,
this
statement is true and the proses are more than the cons. I will discuss my opinion in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with,
risk
leads to achieving success. To clarify, when people perform a
risk
, their goals are more accessible to reach.
For instance
, there are some
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businessmen
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business men
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businessmen
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who improve their situations just
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risking. Elon musk is one of
those person
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. When he was in
a
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big trouble at his earlier step, he took a big
risk
and invested a large amount of his wealth to improve his company even
it
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was
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probably had a dreadful
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for his position.
As a result
, at
this
moment he is the richest man
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the world, due to his approach
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taking a
risk
.
On the other hand
, in some cases, taking a
risk
has a destructive result for a person. Because some people believe, they should take a
risk
without thinking. So, it causes a lot of harmful results on their patches. But the essential thing for risking is to be rational and consider all options before destinations.
For example
, one of my close friends
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his wealth just with
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irrational
risk
.
As a result
,
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he
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hi
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is depressed by his wrong perspective. To conclude my essay, taking a
risk
is one of the key
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to
reach
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our dreams.
However
, we should take it in
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way and
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up all the aspects before
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it practical in our ways. Totally, I believe the advantages of
this
approach are more significant than the disadvantages.
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