many countries use fossil fuels such as coal or oil as the main sources of energy. however, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In the present days, since
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and coal are emitting
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substances into the air, scientists and environmental agencies are encouraging to use
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environmental
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friendly
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sources. Ones can suggest that transferring to replaceable
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sources is advantageous, while
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consider that it has drawbacks. In my opinion, it has
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impact and
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essay will outline reasons for that.
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, if the world is transferred for the use of altered
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fuel
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rather than
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and coal, individuals employed in
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industries will list their job places.
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of
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and coal by other alternatives the demand and
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price of
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and coal will be dropped.
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will lead to unnecessary staff engaged in these industries so
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number of personnel will be realised
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by their employers.
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society.
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, all these factors
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as unemployment and negative outcomes of it
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anxiety or a mental disorder along with a poor community and
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have
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impact.
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, most
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countries
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are not ready for alternative ways of
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, since it requires a lot of effort and research.
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,
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demads
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demands
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funds and extra budget which could pose pressure for the administration and population as well.
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, not being able to have and provide appropriate technologies and procedures for the development of
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and coal replacement and
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not having needed qualified personnel
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thorough preparation and sponsorship, so it could
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drawbacks
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as failure and
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of money
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the government.
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could lead to
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political and economical disorder.
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, not detailed investigation and sufficient
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preparedness
and professionals prior to change into other
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use could bring out extra unneeded expenses and collapse in the society. In conclusion, nowadays
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alternative
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fuel
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such
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as solar or wind
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are
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often discussed and dreamed of by the world.
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, while
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think that it has advantages, others state that it is not beneficial for us. From my perspective,
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and gas should not be replaced since it could have negative results
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unemployed
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people in
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oil
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the oil
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and coal industries and political and economical collapse.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • hydroelectricity
  • geothermal
  • biomass
  • sustainability
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable development
  • energy efficiency
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • ecosystems
  • natural resources
  • energy consumption
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
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