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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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There are many places
that
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tourism
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 role in their
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 it can cause some problematic and complex
problem
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 there,
but
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in my point of view the
benefits
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 are more. In
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 I try to speak about some drawbacks and
benefits
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 and express my opinion. At
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, as a disadvantage, it is obvious
tourism
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 can damage local culture. If there
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not
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no
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 distinguish laws and structures for
tourists
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 and even denizens, differences of cultures in various nations can make complexity problems in
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the destination
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.
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,
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 are annoyed by citizens because of the lack of awareness.
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, some manners are banned in
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the religious
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area
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, and doing them means offensive.
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,
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of
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 are not deniable.
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, it can be the most important source of
incomes
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income
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 in some places. I mean, if we have good knowledge of
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tourists
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tourists'
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 needs and how
set
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price
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prices
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 for any item, we can earn
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 of
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 industry.
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,
tourists
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 really like to pay money for new things,
such
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 as
foods
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food
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, tools,
places
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and places
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.
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, more peace can circulate
by
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through
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tourism
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. Travelling and being familiar with
other peer
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another peer
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 with different
culture
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cultures
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,
language
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languages
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, and ceremonies
,
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 can make you more sympathetic. we learn how can we live peacefully, in
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 world irrespective of our differences.
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, citizens in my little town have learned how to accept different
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 without any fury. These are why I think
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
tourism
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 are more than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. To sum up,
pros
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the pros
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 and cons come together in
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry. On one hand, culture
damaging
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damage
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 is a drawback of it, but
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, good income
resource
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resources
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 and spreading more peace are advantages of it. So,
benefits
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 are more if we can set effective and clear laws and teach them to
tourists
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 and denizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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