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Some experts believe that children should begin learning a foreign language in primary school rather than secondary school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is often argued that learning a foreign language at a young
age
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 is more beneficial for
students
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 at the same time some people argue that it is a
burden
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 for primary school
students
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. in my viewpoint learning a foreign language can develop communication skills as well as they will have a high possibility of getting good jobs
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 the primary
age
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 of children is considered as the hub of learning.
However
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, there are some
drawbacks
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such
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 as it will be a
burden
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 for the
students
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 and it may affect learning the main
subjects
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. But the advantages outweigh the
drawbacks
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.
First
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 of all, there are many advantages
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 learning a foreign language at a young
age
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. The primary
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 of children is considered
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the hub of learning
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, in Japan
students
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 are taught five different
languages
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 at the primary level and continue to speak till the end
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 of their life. Another advantage is that it is very helpful for getting a job in foreign
countries
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.
For instance
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, learning
languages
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 like Arabic and English will help you to get jobs in
countries
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 like UAE and Canada.
In addition
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, it can help in developing your communication skills which are very helpful when you are visiting foreign
countries
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.
However
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, still there are some
drawbacks
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. learning foreign
languages
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 at a young
age
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 may be a
burden
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 for learners because it may affect in
learning
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 of the main
subjects
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,
for example
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, it is difficult for some
students
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 to complete science and maths portions if they are having activities or assignments in learning foreign
languages
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.
Further
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, it may feel like a
burden
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 for young
students
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 if the number of learning
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are
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 more. In conclusion, even though there are some
drawbacks
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 like learning at a young
age
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 may be a
burden
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 or it may in affect learning the main
subjects
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 like science.
However
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, it is clear that there are many benefits
such
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 as learning foreign
languages
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 at a young
age
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 helps in learning faster as well as it helps in developing communication skills.
Additionally
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, it helps in getting more job opportunities in foreign
countries
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.
Hence
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, the benefits of learning different
languages
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 at a young
age
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 outweigh its
drawbacks
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.
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