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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the number of
construction
 of houses is increasing rapidly as the population grows exponentially.
Space
 availability plays a critical role in house
construction
. I want to share my views about building homes by protecting the countryside.
Firstly
,
people
 are rapidly moving from villages to cities for education, to start various businesses etc. The
construction
 of houses has increased by the contractors to accommodate all the
people
 who have migrated.
Secondly
, the
space
 availability has come down because of the latest structures. The only way to overcome the issue is the
construction
 of apartments with all the facilities,
such
 as parking, indoor games for children, proper drainage and sufficient water facilities and walking spaces for all age groups without disturbing the surrounding environment.
Instead
 of disturbing the present situation of the countryside, it is better to construct separate colonies in limited available
space
 by recreating the village environment. Take Hongkong as an example of
this
 similar situation, as there is no
space
 to construct any structure in Hongkong. They started building homes, airports, or any
construction
 on the water a few years back. Sometimes, lack of availability allows for creating or building something unexpected, If we take the other way.
Finally
, I want to conclude that the better option is to accommodate all the
people
 with minimum requirements without disturbing the villages through the
construction
 of apartments or recreating the village environment by constructing the colonies in urban areas. Protecting the countryside and satisfying
people
's needs are very important in the present situation.
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