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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world, a lot of
celebrities
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 become better known due to their wealth and charisma than their success, and they are bad examples for teenagers. I agree with
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 of all, in the 21st century, it is very difficult to achieve achievement, as well as in each area, there is high competition. Because of that, many stars have worked twice as hard and they can have an influence on the world and become an example for children.
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, thanks to their hard work, the children started to inspire them.
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, Lionel Messi is the idol of millions of kids. After all, many teenagers express interest in looking at Messi's games and admiring his
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. Eventually, due to him, multitudes of young people decided to maintain a healthy life.
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, the array of
celebrities
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 can affect the positive.
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 of all, a lot of stars recommend great items which should be beneficial and vital for society. After all, nowadays, public figures try to support local charities
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 advertising something excellent in order to ensure young people do not get into awful ways.
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, it is Cristiano Ronaldo. He always notices that junk foods and drinks are unhealthy for the organism.
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,
celebrities
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 make the rarity of their achievements even more attractive than they thought before. To conclude, I would say that every coin has two faces. In
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 way, personalities have both impacts as well as benefits, and I think their effects are more effective on youngsters.
Celebrities
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 ought to be more responsible and enjoy their achievements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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