Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued

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some

people

that the number of male and female students being accepted by universities should be equal in all subjects.I completely agree with

this

idea. There are reasons that

both

boys and girls can apply for any subject equally. Gender is not an impediment to

people

's abilities, and

both

genders have been showing their talents in various areas

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which they were supposed to be exclusive to one gender, since many years ago.

For instance

, there are many successful women in construction and oil engineering, whereas it is thought that

men

would be more appropriate for

such

areas.

Furthermore

, the majority of

men

have been prosperous in fields namely cooking and sewing, which most

people

consider

them

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feminine fields.

However

, the world's most famous chiefs are

both

men

and

also

there are very popular fashion designers among the male groups.

In addition

, restrictions in some subjects for one gender may have many deficiencies for

people

both

personally and socially.

Firstly

, when a major is prohibited for a specific group of

people

, the

people

in the other group might not be able to discover their potential abilities and they would suffer a lack of opportunities in life.

This

will have a tremendous negative effect on the person as well as society

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because it will lose a potential talent which could be very useful in the future.

Secondly

this

approach through particular majors is a sign of bias and prejudice in politicians who have made

such

decisions. So it has a negative impression on society's attitude

against

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the government and it may result in controversial situations between

people

. In conclusion, I believe that there are more advantages if

both

men

and women should have equal opportunities to attend all subjects.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

gender diversity
fostering innovation
educational experience
enforcing gender quotas
merit and potential
individual achievements
natural differences
gender equality
reducing gender stereotypes
balanced workforce
traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
fluctuating applicant numbers
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