In most developed countries shopping is not about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience?

In modern
countries
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people used to do shopping.
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development
as relaxing and spending
time
together with
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or family. I believe that
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buying
being
goods can give you positive emotions. You can relax and
do
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not think of the work and daily problems. When
go
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out and buy something it makes me feel happy. You have
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for
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for
yourself.
Also
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it is a chance to spend
time
with your friend or
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family
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family
. I like
this
time
when we can do shopping together and
then
stay at the
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cafe
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to drink
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tea
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talk. To conclude, I think that shopping is famous in developed countries.
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