By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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In the
last
decade, there are arguments relevant to
punishment
who committed a crime. So many
people
believe the
punishment
for
death
is a fair idea.
On the other
hand
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some
people
do not think that they believe
this
is not the best way to punish a crime.
However
, in my opinion, humans should give up the
death
penalty
punishment
of society’s psychology and misjudgments ıssues. The
first
reason is that owing to the
death
penalty, so many
people
suffer from mental illness. Due to living broadcasts, they always see dying
people
and it affected both young ones and their parents mentally.
For
instance
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the
last
resource says;
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Children
Childrens
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children
are afraid of cops more than ever, whenever they hear cops sound, they suppose cops coming for
themselves
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and it leads to a lot of mental diseases
such
as anxiety and panic
attack
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.
Moreover
, it affects
also
adults.
Secondly
, unfortunately, there are so many misjudgments situation happened especially
last
5 years. Several
people
died because of a lack of evidence and misunderstandings problems.
Furthermore
, due to judgment failure, every year a few humans go to jail for nearly their lifetime.
For example
last
year a man
released
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from jail because
actually
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he is not guilty, but they understand
after
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50 years later. A wise man said;’’If there is a human, there is always failure
happens
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.’’ All things considered,
death
punishment
is hazardous for all
of
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the
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humans. Because it led to corruption in community psychology and misjudgments ıssues. Governments ought to stop
this
kind of
punishment
.
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