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The chart illustrates information about the use of cooking
oil
 when producing perfume. Overall, there are ten stages used in the production.
To begin
 with, fire is used in heating
water
 in the jar,
then
, the steam produced passes through a pipe which leads to a container with aromatic plants. In the same jar, steam and
oil
vapor
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vapour
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are
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is
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 produced. From there, the steam and
oil
vapor
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vapour
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 passes
in
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into
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 the condenser which contains cold
water
 at the bottom and hot
water
 on top. In the
next
 stage, the
water
 mixed with essential
oil
 flows to the
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separator
seperator
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separator
 where
oil
 and
water
 are
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separated
seperated
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separated
.
Then
finally
,
hydrolat
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the hydrolat
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 is left at the bottom of the container and comes out from its own outlet on the right side and the
oil
 is left on top and oozes out from the tape on the left side.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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