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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage dose plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #dose #government #individuals
It is obvious that
people
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 attitude toward the
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environment
invironment
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environment
 has affected it badly. One of the tools that
used
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are used
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 today and has a huge negative impact on the environment is
plastic
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a plastic
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product
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products
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. These
products
 had affected the biodiversity on the planet,
espically
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especially
 flura and fauna and raised
air
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the air
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polution
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pollution
 rate. For those reasons,
government
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the government
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 should cooperate with people to tackle
this
serios
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serious
 issue in order to save the world.
Plastic
 bags, bottles and packaging
is
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are
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 not the
problem
 but the way that people get rid of them. There are many different dangerous ways that done by the public ,
for example
 throwing
this
 rubbish into the sea which
affect
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 marinelife and
cause
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causes
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death
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the death
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 of many sea creatures.
In addition
 to that, some
society
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societies
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 tend to burn
this
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this plastic product
these plastic products
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plastic
products
 which resulted in
increase
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increased
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 air
polution
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pollution
. In my county,
this
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polution
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pollution
 raised
respiratory
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the respiratory
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 disorders rate and
government
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the government
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 spend
alot
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a lot
 of money to remedy
this
problem
. prevention is better
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than
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that
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than
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 cure.
This
an
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is an
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 important point to start solving the
problem
.
Government
 should enforce laws that ban the usage of
plastic
products
 . If anyone
disobey
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 laws, fines and
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maybe
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may be
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maybe
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 prison will be a good solution. Saving
the
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nature is not only
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the government
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government
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responsibility
responsibilty
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responsibility
 but
also
 individuals should cooperate with
ligeslations
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legislation
legislations
 to make the plan
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succeed
succed
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succeed
.
Also
 raising public
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
 about
this
problem
 from early years by educating children in schools would help
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 in
this
 situation. To conclude,
although
this
problem
 is one of the most dangerous issues, cooperation between folk and community could save the diversity on the planet by following governmental instructions and
reduce
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reducing
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 the usage of
plastic
products
.
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