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You are a member of Newcomers Association of Prince Edward Island (PEI), Canada which meets regularly at 'Maid Marians'. During last visit, you all met at 'Maid Marians' but food served there was not satisfactory. write a letter to the manager. In your letter, • explain what went wrong • suggest what should be done to ensure that you and your group return to the restaurant • describe any experience that you appreciate yet

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing for
Newcomers
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the Newcomers
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 Association of PEI. We often meet at
yor
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your
restaurant
 for lunch or dinner.
Last
 Saturday, we had a reunion of members at your
restaurant
. Unfortunately, the meal was not good. I want to say that, we ordered chicken and that was not cooked properly.
Apart from
this
 Lentil Curry was
also
 too much spicy.
Moreover
,
server
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the server
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 was
also
 slow but we told
hime
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him
 about
this
 and he
appriciated
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appreciated
 our request which was totally positive for us. We will not come
at
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to
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 your
restaurant
 until you give us assurance that
this
 will not happen again in future.
However
, our all past experiences in your
restaurant
was
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were
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 totally appreciatable
such
 as, your staff was so polite, food of your
restaurant
 was fresh and healthy that's why we came to your
restaurant
 frequently. I hope you solve
this
 matter and waiting for your positive reply. Yours Sincerely, Sophia Brown.
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'yor' instead of 'your' and 'hime' instead of 'him.'
task achievement
Clarify your corrective measures by specifying what the restaurant can do to ensure better quality food and service in the future.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, separate the complaint about the chicken from the commendation of the waiter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, which is suitable for this context.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear closing remark and a request for action, which helps in providing a complete response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately used, adding to its formal tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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