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Some experts believe that it it better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advaantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some would argue that it is more useful for youngsters to acquire a new
language
 at elementary
school
 rather than middle
school
. While gaining a new
language
 at a young age can improve skills, I believe that it can take away children’s free time. The main advantage of learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 is that it improves learning skills.
Besides
this
 enables them to be quick witters and to have an aptitude for languages, which is helpful for a rising generation to absorb knowledge in the future.
For example
, linguistics which was learned at the age of 6 to 11 is more reliable and permanent than at teenage ages.
As a result
, it develops in their head as a native
language
.
On the other hand
, burdening the youngsters' brains with different languages and subjects can make them feel confused. Especially at the youngest ages of middle
childhood
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 it can be hard to understand grammatical structures and new words and it can accelerate them to start roat learning and fill the brain with extra information.
This
 leads them to not having free time for their other activities and not spending a short childhood saturated.
For example
, a girl can study all her middle childhood and become a brilliant brain person. But
on the other hand
, she won’t have any memories which she can remember and laugh at. In conclusion,
although
 learning new languages at primary
school
 is helpful for future life, children should balance spending quality education time with fun.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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