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In many countries, people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. what are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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Nowadays many
goods
 purchased worldwide have a short lifecycle and to some extent are treated as disposable by a consumer.
This
 doesn't apply to fast-moving consumer
goods
 alone, but to more sophisticated products
such
 as clothing and high-tech
goods
. We can name advancements in technology, management approach, globalization and many other factors which paved the way for the current state of affairs. Apparently, many products have become affordable due to lower costs of production meanwhile causing a lot of problems in ecology and society's attitude towards consumerism. The evolution of production management and accounting techniques has had a great impact on the costs of
goods
 manufactured across many industries, where remarkable brands
such
 as Ford, McDonald's, Walmart, and Toyota have been in avant-garde revolutionizing manufacturing by introducing assembly line, Kanban, standardization, lean manufacturing and other ground-breaking approaches.
This
 has allowed to
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 and overhead costs. Along with the technology changing rapidly, we have a formula for functionally short-lived mass-produced
goods
. As advancements in technology have increased quality of life, they have had a negative impact on the environment, society's mindset and other intangible aspects of everyday life. We can witness landfill growing each day, tonnes of garbage forming islands drifting in the Pacific ocean, rainforests being chopped down which leads to the extermination of rare species, ozone layer being slightly and continuously destroyed. Along with apparent ecological issues, the everchanging range of products supplied and pushed to an ordinary end customer doesn't do any good to the overall mental health of the modern public. Despite the abovementioned, mentioned problems of a consumerist community can be addressed by an ordinary consumer individually.
This
 can contribute to the resolution of the issues on a global scale.
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