Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicine and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think is a positive or a negative development?

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There is an increasing number of

people

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who choose to treat themselves with alternative medicine and treatments rather than coming to the hospital. In my opinion,

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is a negative development since

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movement not only can be the culprit of many new dangerous

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but is

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harmful to a person's health in the long run.

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and foremost, it can be clearly seen that, with the burgeoning of medicine, many hazardous

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in the past can now be easily treated with the help of antibiotics.

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, many viruses and

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are

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developing as well;

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, overconsumption of antibiotics can help these dangerous micro-specimens to evolve faster and soon, they will have the ability to defend themselves against

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medicine. A prime example of

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matter is the Covid-19 virus.

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super virus derived from a normal flu virus

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and has created one of the biggest pandemics of all time.

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of all,

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may not have a full understanding of the

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that they are suffered

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, many of those who choose to treat themselves might follow the wrong path by choosing an inadequate treatment that later on could worsen the situation of their health.

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, a lot of symptoms might be underestimated by

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but can only be cured under the speculation of doctors.

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people

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who got cancer only found out about it in the final stage of the disease where it is impossible to be cured. In conclusion, switching from visiting doctors to self-treatment can be the main reason behind the appearance of new dangerous

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development can be detrimental to a person's health.

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