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With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Due to the surging population in cities majority of the people reside in homes with hardly any or no
garden
. Not much can be done to address
this
 situation but one can always choose where they live. obviously, that would mean spending a lot of money, as there is high demand for houses in the cities. In my opinion, having no
garden
 affects both
adults
 as well as
children
 in a negative way. some of the consequences of not owning a house with a patio are given below. Having no
garden
 affects
children
 physically, as they are left with no space to play outdoor games. When they do not indulge themselves in outdoor activities their immunity and overall health are affected in a negative way.
children
 with gardens do not fall sick as easily as
children
 from houses with no gardens.
Children
 lose their precious childhood years being confined indoors and the only things they would indulge themselves with are electronic devices
such
 as mobile phones, computers, television and so on,which would affect their mental health in a bad way.
Likewise
, having no patio takes a toll on
adults
 too, but in a psychological manner. If a home has a
garden
,
then
 one could spend time gardening which would actually help them relax mentally. Gardening is a stress buster, even little activity in nature like watering plants would aid in one's mental health and being surrounded by the nature is a soothing experience. As seen clearly not having a
garden
 not only affects
children
 but
adults
 too. In conclusion, the surging population in cities due to which people have no other choice but to reside in homes with hardly or no
garden
 has negative effects on the well-being of the people both
adults
 as well as
children
.
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