Some people believe that now a days we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #choices

It is often thought that at present a person has various options to choose

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In my opinion, I agree that

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individuals

indivuduals

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individuals

have choices in their student life as well as in

job

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sector.

However

, I

also

believe that so many varieties of selection make

people

confuse

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take the proper

decision

To begin

with, earlier maximum universities did not have too many

subject

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for

studies

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, two ago even in big varsities of Bangladesh Bangle, English, Economics, Physics etc. basic subjects are

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. But, now at the time of taking admission students

get

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huge opportunities

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selection according to the need of the modern world. Apart from

this

, doing a

job

also

become very easy, as

people

can select a

job

depending on their

demand

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For instance

, some

people

like to work in day shift whereas others love to do it at night which helps in their time management.

Besides

, diversion in

job

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the job

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also

helps in the development of a nation because it

also

evaluate

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new thought.

Such

as, the IT sector of India is developing rapidly and a big portion of the young generation are

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getting

geeting

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seeking

opportunities to apply their thought by working here.

On the contrary

, finding different options to take a

job

can create

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a problem

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problem

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problems

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to select the proper

decision

, which is a serious issue at present, because it makes

people

confuse to judge the right one. To illustrate,

people

do not apply for

the

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job

which is beneficial to them

in the long run

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they may make

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decision

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thinking about the present situation of the circumstances. In conclusion, it can be said that though men have so many facilities to choose

but

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, they need to focus deeply when

select

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one for avoiding any kind of wrong

decision

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