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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it.

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Dear Mr. Foo, I am writing to request a temporary assignment at the head
office
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 in Sydney. Mr. Fulman, our regional manager, asked me in person at the annual meeting
last
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 month, if I was willing to fill up the Marketing Communications Manager position to assist with their year-long campaign for the newly opened resort. I intend to be there for six months, starting
this
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 January 2024. As for the current working arrangement in our
office
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, I have assigned an intern, Cindy Lim, to take charge of my duties. She will continue with the day-to-day graphic-related work and other tasks that I usually handle. We will arrange a regular meeting every morning to check on each task's completion, so rest assured, no task is backlogged. I would
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 like to seek your kind assistance in acting as her immediate supervisor in the
office
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while
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 I am away. I assure you that she could work independently,
however
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 as she has only spent a short period of time in our
office
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, she might occasionally ask for help. Thank you for your kind attention, it is much appreciated. Yours sincerely, Estrina K Natali

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task achievement
Ensure you are directly addressing all three points of the task in a clear and comprehensive manner. The request to work at the head office, your plans for your work, and seeking help were mentioned, but you could elaborate further on how your position will bring value to the head office and why your experience is fitting for this opportunity.
coherence cohesion
Maintain the clear structure you've provided, which aids in following the logical flow of your ideas. Consider incorporating a wider range of cohesive devices to enhance the connections between your ideas, although what you have used is fitting and sufficient.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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