Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that the flourishing and development of technology
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some universities offer distance courses as an alternative to classes held
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at universities, and in my opinion,
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trend has both some advantages and some drawbacks. Long-distance courses cause some problems. As a primary illustration, sitting in front of computers and electronic devices for a long time can lead to boredom, physical problems, and being easily distracted by the surrounding environment, while, in school or university, their
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, communications keep in touch with the other
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, communications gradually vanished . In spite of some drawbacks mentioned
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, using online courses has several benefits.
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and foremost, educational amenities contribute are allocated equally among
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who really desire to achieve their goals. To clarity
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, I have to say that, many
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around the world especially those who live in
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remote areas have a chance to participate in some webinars that have been holding onheld by famous universities and
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have more interaction with international professors.
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, some
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part-time jobs so they can allocate their time and effort with a better schedule.
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, with balance in their lives, they can cope with their barriers. To sum up,
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using online study is one of the best ways for learning, it has some negative impacts too. It seems to me, that
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of combination traditional and modern ways can be a great consequence in education
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beneficial in the field of education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • tuition fees
  • commuting
  • accommodation
  • multimedia
  • interactive tools
  • enhance
  • cater to
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personalized attention
  • complex concepts
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • structure
  • extracurricular activities
  • networking
  • university experience
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