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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products any ware in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Globalization led to some changes in society. One of them is easy accessibility to the same product in the world.
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 advancement
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 nations to be like one other more and more.
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 it seems
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 a positive development, I believe that it is a negative improvement both for today and for the future. I
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 of all, when states are becoming more and more similar, they lose their identity.
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 they may even assimilate.
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, producing products everywhere
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 local products to be ignored.
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, in countries on the African continent, the new generation does not know their old traditional
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 as ethnic skirts, different hats or wooden slippers.
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, most children only know western clothing.
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, because people have access to the same
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 wherever they are sold throughout the world, it may be a decrease in cultural diversity, as states all around the world are becoming alike. All states have local products of their own.
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, if these
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 are manufactured by global companies, they lose not only monetary value both
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 moral value.
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, the homeland of sushi is Japan.
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, when travelling, it is simple to view and consume sushi abroad.
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 situation
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 decreasing value. In conclusion, because consumers may purchase the same
goods
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 everywhere in the globe, countries are becoming more and more similar. It is a detrimental development because it
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 a loss of identity,
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decline in cultural diversity and assimilation.
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, it is predictable that the similarity between nations will increase over time due to globalization.
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