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More and more people read news from the Internet, but newspapers will continue to be read by the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that a growing number of
people
 tend to read online
news
. While some
people
 argue that the majority will still read paper media, I disagree with
this
 idea because I believe that the
Internet
 is more likely to be the mainstream. There is no doubt that many
people
, especially
the
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elderly person, read
newspapers
 as their daily routine. The old
people
 are more familiar with traditional
lifestyle
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,
such
 as
newspapers
 and radio, rather than
modern
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a modern
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 one, and their
behaviors
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 seem to be difficult to change. Another possible reader of
newspapers
 would be those who might not be able to have a reliable online connection. In
this
 case,
newspapers
 may be a better option for them.
However
, with the development of modern technology,
news
 from the
Internet
 is likely to attract more
reader
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readers
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.
Firstly
, the
Internet
 allows the
news
 to be transmitted more rapidly, and both readers and journalists would feel convenient
to use
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 the
Internet
.
For example
, journalists tend to post their up-to-date
news
 on the
Internet
 rather than on
a
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paper media, and readers from all around the world can read
these
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news
 on their smartphones or laptops instantaneously.
Secondly
, most young adults spend their leisure time on their electronic devices, and
the
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newspapers
 would be the least likely thing they would read.
Finally
, as the young population grow older and
become
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 the majority of
population
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, it would be clear that the
Internet
 would become the
first
 choice for most
people
. In conclusion, I believe that
although
newspapers
 are still popular
in
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nowadays,
the
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journalism is changing rapidly and online
news
 will undoubtedly be the most favourable source for us.
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