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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #spaces #towns #cities
Open space and
cities
 planting
trees
 or
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building
bulding
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building
hous
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house
has
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 become a towering issue. I think it is right
plant
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to plant
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 saplings and
trees
and
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apply
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agreed
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onagreed
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 it.
This
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 essay I will
to
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apply
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consider these. On the hand,
a
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apply
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plant
trees
 in
cities
extremely
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 beneficial to the people.
For instance
, places
plant
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planted
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 with
trees
are
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is
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 always shaded. Of course, it helps people when
weather
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the weather
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 is hot. It is a great opportunity
the
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 elderly to go for a walk.
Moreover
,
trees
 generated oxygen and help to reduce pollution in
cities
 and improve air quality.
On the other hand
, if
cities
 build more houses,
firstly
, it will
pullut
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pollute
 the air.
Secondly
,there will more traffic in
city
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the city
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.
Furthermore
, in my opinion, more houses should
be build
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be built
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 in the villages. Because not only
cities
,
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 but
also
 villages would develop. In conclusion,
population
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the population
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 need to
plant
 a lot of
trees
 in
cities
. Because the demand is very high these days.
Moreover
,
trees
 are a natural thing that protects us from unwanted germs.
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