Watching television has positive effects on children

When
television
was invented,
people
could not adapt to it for a while, and over
time
,
people
couldn't part with it,
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because
becouse
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because
there are many things that attract them
on
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tv.
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Children
Childern
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Children
are
also
very addicted to
television
.Because there are interesting shows for
children
.
Then
with the passage of
time
television
became a very interesting thing for
children
as well. On the one hand, it is good to watch tv. Because it has a
lot
of sports shown. That
are
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good for kids, and
children
will receive advice
that is
useful to them and I think their thinking will be different.
On the other hand
, watching
television
takes a
lot
of
time
.
Children
can waste a
lot
of
time
and there is no question that they will become lazy. Nowadays we live in a
time
of advanced technology the fact is that the young generation uses
television
and social
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networks
networts
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networks
a
lot
this
can
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cause
couse
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cause
teenagers to become disconnected from the world My
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
is that I think young
people
should spend more of their free
time
in sports and libraries. Books young
people
will read more books and not be cut off from the world.
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