In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

Many cities in the world are organized in
such
a way that they have different
districts
with distinct functions
such
as working, shopping or
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studying
studing
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studying
. While a lot of urban planners point out
advantages
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the advantages
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of
this
approach, there are many flaws that ordinary people and businesses have to suffer. In
this
essay I will discuss what are the benefits of organizing cities into specific areas,
but
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and
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why
this
policy may hurt
city
sustainable development in the long run. The main benefit of planning cities into distinct
districts
is that it is easier for the
city
authorities to
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organize
organaize
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organise
and provide different
city
functions in that way.
For example
, when a
city
has a dedicated
offices
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area, it
easier
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to plan how many offices to build, where to build them and how to organize public transport
connection
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, which makes
city
development more predictable.
Moreover
,
this
approach allows
to
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decrease
descrease
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decrease
office
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spaces in other
city
areas, providing more land for,
for example
, households. Obviously, organizing
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the city
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city
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cities
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into specific
districts
makes urban development more
managable
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manageable
.
On the other hand
, that kind of district specialization leads to the lack of vital urban functions in other
city
areas. For
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instance
intance
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instance
, if a
city
provides educational services, including all the schools, just in one district, it creates a tremendous
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imbalance
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inbalance
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in people`s everyday life, as they can not have their children taught in their home area.
This
results in them taking their kids long hours to school, than wasting their time on a long commute to the office, as it is in another district.
Such
area specialization makes it nearly impossible to organize a balanced lifestyle in a
city
, which might lead people to leave the place. In my opinion, those
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disadvantages
disadvatanges
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disadvantages
heavily
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outweighs
outweights
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outweigh
the possible advantages, especially in the long run. In
this
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I argued that arranging
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urban
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districts
in a heavily specialized way creates disadvantages,
such
as long
commute
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, that make sustainable life in a
city
hardly
imposible
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impossible
.
Therefore
, in my
opinion
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flaws of
this
policy are larger
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to its benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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