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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exaples from your own experience.

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Although
 international
tourism
 has now become a key industry in many nations worldwide, some
people
 are of the opinion that it is more likely to lead to serious conflicts
instead
 of greater understanding between
individuals
 and different cultures.
However
, I do not hold the same view. Contrary to the belief of many,
traveling
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 overseas develops
in
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 sensitivity to other cultures. By visiting countries abroad, tourists get exposed to the customs and traditions of a particular nation. They meet new
people
, explore different communities, take part in local festivals, and even learn a foreign language.
This
 cultural immersion fosters in
individuals
 a deeper understanding and appreciation of diversity.
Furthermore
, global
tourism
 promotes cultural interaction between
people
. Locals learn by communicating with visitors from outside, who bring with them new ideas and different perspectives.
Likewise
,
this
 creates opportunities for tourists to introduce their own culture to the local
people
, and
such
 patterns of interaction enable both parties to overcome their biases, tolerate their differences, and develop mutual understanding.
Finally
, international
tourism
 plays a major role in building and maintaining peace.
Traveling
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 abroad can lead to changes in attitudes among
people
 and serve as a vehicle for compassion and trust, thereby promoting unity and harmony between
individuals
 and nations. In fact, there are many examples of post-conflict societies that have now completely recovered because of their initiative to support sustainable global
tourism
 To conclude, while some
individuals
 argue that international
tourism
 results in greater tension among
individuals
 from different countries, I do not support
this
 view. From my perspective, it
instead
 brings greater understanding among
people
 and nations.
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