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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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People
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 from some countries argue that it is more essential for them to build or buy their own
house
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 or flat. Personally, I don't think
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 is always a
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 choice. There are certainly some reasons for cases where some individuals consider it critical to own their home.
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 with, they feel more stable and comfortable living in it as they do not have to set aside
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 amount of their salary for monthly or annual
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.
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, it is realistic that the males who have their dwelling
house
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 under their name are more likely to make a successful proposal
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 because owning a
house
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 usually proves their ability to offer their spouse a sufficient
life
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.
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, some Chinese parents especially hope to find a wealthy son-in-law for their daughter so that she may live a decent
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 after getting married, so conditions
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us
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 a
house
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, car and enough deposit are openly stated before they give their marriage
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 approval.
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 situation is not positive despite the adequate reasons for its appearance because it has confused and frustrated many
people
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. For one thing,
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phenomenon
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 could serve as a "catalyst" for bad competition among young
people
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, who sometimes may feel overwhelmed when finding it difficult to prepare a suitable place in order to marry the girl he loves. For another, multiple choices for
life
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 should be encouraged and supported. Whichever type of room
people
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 choose to reside in, they should always be given the right to enjoy their moments in
life
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. To conclude, it could be well understood that some citizens prefer to have their own dwelling residential houses.
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, it should
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 that attaching too much importance to that may give rise to undesirable consequences.
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 we should embrace all possible choices when it comes to selecting
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ways of living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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