Some people claim tobacco has brought social problems and smoking should be banned. To extend do you agree or disagree?

The consumption of
tobacco
is increasing nowadays. Many people think that
tobacco
has some negative impacts on society and should be prohibited. I strongly agree with the statement because consuming
tobacco
can bring serious health problems and it affects the community.
First
, consuming
tobacco
increases the risks for cancers at 13 sites, particularly the lung, and for heart disease, stroke, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease. Banned the production and distribution of
this
product will help the government to mitigate these risks.
For example
, Indonesia is a country that does not implement strict regulations on
tobacco
, in recent years, the number of cancer patients has increased in line with the number of
tobacco
consumers. So, it clearly has a correlation between the impacts and governance control.
Second
, not only will bring harmful to its smokers, but
tobacco
smoke
also
has a bad effect on the people around the smokers. People around
tobacco
smokers will breathe in the smoke and even more damage as passive enjoyers.
For instance
, secondhand smoke is contaminated by the person who is smoking and inhales that poison gas, which was doubly contaminated, more than smoking it. Because the government does not implement restriction areas for smoking, a citizen will not enjoy the environment and the city they live in.
Therefore
, stoped
this
product will lead to a healthy environment and increase the quality of society as a whole. Overall,
tobacco
has many disadvantages for its consumer and society. Prohibiting
this
plant will help the authority control serious diseases and make the environment healthier.
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