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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The role of
school
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 in childraising is always controversial. A certain portion of
parents
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 argues that
home
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 teaching is the most effective way of
child
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development
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, whereas others put importance on lectures in
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traditional classrooms. I personally believe that going to
school
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 is still meaningful for
child
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development
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 since
students
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 are able to acquire not only academic knowledge but
also
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 social
skills
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 at
school
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. Some
parents
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 believe that
home
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-
school
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 is the best way of education to enhance the academic abilities of their kids.
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, at
home
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, adults, i.e.,
parents
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 or private teachers, can focus on only a few
children
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,
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 to the classrooms, where a few teachers have to handle more than 30 or even 40
students
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. At
home
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,
parents
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 can provide their
children
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 with more efficient
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, which is customized for each
child
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. It enhances the productivity of learning.
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, especially in
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 global society, communication
skills
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 and networking abilities are becoming an essential part of a
child
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's
development
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, and
such
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skills
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 are what
children
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 can acquire at
school
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 through discussion in class or relationships with peers.
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, according to an article from Tokyo
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 I have read recently, the number of university
students
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 who can not receive job offers is increasing, even though their grades at university are not hindering it. The author states that the majority of
students
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 have a problem regarding communication
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 because they had been forced into remote classes due to the Covid-19 pandemic. He concludes that studying only at
home
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 has significant drawbacks in terms of personal
development
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. In conclusion, admitting that there is a benefit of raising
children
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 at
home
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, I personally reckon that going to
school
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 takes still an essential part of a
child
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's education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • traditional schooling
  • development
  • individualized education
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • one-on-one attention
  • learning style
  • pace
  • safe and controlled learning environment
  • practical learning
  • negative influences
  • socialization
  • teamwork skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • independence
  • time management
  • qualified teachers
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • sense of community
  • hybrid approach
  • personality
  • striking a balance
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