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Tourism has emerged as one of the biggest industries of this decade, but its disadvantages cannot be overlooked. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is often argued that
tourism
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 has climbed to the top of the industries in
this
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 decade, but its downsides cannot be ignored.
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 I personally disagree that the
disadvantages
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 of
tourism
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 cannot be overlooked because for some countries
tourism
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 Is their biggest money grabber. For a
country
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 like
Thailand
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 where
tourism
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 is our biggest income, the advantages definitely outweigh the
disadvantages
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 so it can be overlooked. If one day, tourists suddenly decided not to come to
Thailand
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 anymore the
country
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 will suffer a fatal blow financially. Take the Coronavirus pandemic ,
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,
Thailand
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's GDP dropped around 5-10% because there are no tourists not only did it affect the GDP but natives and merchants were
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 affected as well because travellers are their main source of income as soon as they stop
coming
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 their income stopped as well. Some even lost their jobs because the business suffer a loss and had to reduce the number. Most of
Thailand
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's major cities are based on
tourism
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 as well ,especially Phuket and Pattaya. Imagine these two cities without travellers, hotel industries and restaurants will suffer a great loss because the majority of their customers are foreigners and it will cause tons of hotels to go bankrupt which will
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 affect the whole
country
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's economy and currency. To conclude, I disagree that the
disadvantages
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 of
tourism
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 cannot be overlooked. For countries where
tourism
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 are their biggest earner like
Thailand
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 because it creates job opportunities for its citizen and supports the
country
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's economy, It is undeniably better to overlook the
disadvantages
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 rather than suffer from financial losses.
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