Many societies has its homeless people. some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money, to what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays, due to the economic impact of covid, which caused job losses, the masses lost their property and it leads to homelessness in pretty much every part of the world. Governments and society trying to give them

money

is not only the solution, and in

this

essay, I will discuss below in detail.

Firstly

, homelessness is a growing potential problem, as a solution, the government is trying to help with

money

as a quick relief to recover.

This

is causing individuals to make them lazy since they think we may get

money

this

forever.

Instead

, organizations think in a different way to provide long-term solutions.

For example

, creating the funding to construct affordable homes to fight homeless concerns, because a home is the

first

thing every person thinks to own, it will give them strong support to keep their life happy and having their own home makes them live better and focus on their life.

Secondly

, we can see lots of people roaming on the road to beg for food, shelter and fund. Most of the time we give them

money

while we are passing on the road, and it is not the right thing because they think that

this

is always the best way since we can earn

money

as a beggar, alternatively, we should teach them to fight with the government to plan for the ideal solution.

In addition

, As a resident of the country, we pay taxes from our earnings, we are deserved to live better, and government should provide counselling to invest their capital in the right places to keep their

money

growing to get help in hard times.

Furthermore

, as per 2022 estimations, 7 per cent of the world's population has their lives better with proper financial planning. To conclude ,

money

is a potential asset to solve every problem, but we should not throw

money

at homeless people, we should try to encourage them to learn ways to earn

money

this

can help them to stand on their own for the rest of their life.

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