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How has the modern eating habits changed? Discuss it's influence on our generation?

#habits #influence #generation
Eating is an essential part of life. Eating habits in
current
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 period
does
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do
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 have
a
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considerable change compared
ancient
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civilization
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civilizations
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. Food is fuel for our body without which we become inactive or malnourished. In my opinion, modern cuisine has more detrimental effects on our
health
 than
early
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 period.
To begin
 with, ancient people used to consume raw and fresh meals. The vegetables and meats in
early
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 days were free of pollution and
environmental
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environmentally
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 hazardous
chemicals
.
Thus
 leading to good
health
 and
greater
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a greater
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 lifespan.
However
,
nowdays
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nowadays
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 everyone has awareness of
food
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the food
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 they consume.
For instance
, most
of
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the
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people look
the
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at the
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 minerals and vitamins list per serving in every processed
diet
 before they eat.
This
 is because most of our plants and animals are impacted
with
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by
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 pollution.
Thus
 leading to some vitamin deficiency. And to supplement
this
 deficiency doctor
advices
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advises
 us to take
diet
 supplement tablets. There are some benefits in
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modern
mordern
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modern
 cuisine
such
 as it is available ready-made. The time
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 cooking is less so that we can spend our valuable time and effort in other areas of our daily activity.
For example
, we can get a check on what we consume. Today I can eat
dish
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a dish
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 which is
high
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the high
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 source
on
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of
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protein
protien
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protein
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tomorrow
tommorrow
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tomorrow
 I can have
little
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a little
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 bit of Vitamin B complex. So we can see how much we intake and keep a check on our
diet
. In spite of
above
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the above
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benefits
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 there are more demerits in current cuisine. Studies show that more than millions of people
has
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health
 problems with
our
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their
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 daily food habits. The
health
 problem may vary from minor to major illness.
This
 can happen with or without our knowledge.
For instance
, daily intake of Junk foods can cause cancer, obesity and diabetes. These
health
 ailments can
also
 be caused by pollution. The best example could be the preservation
chemicals
 like wax coated on foods like
apple
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apples
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 and
yam
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yams
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. These
chemicals
 are used to preserve
the
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vegetables for
long
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a long
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 time. Eventually, to sum up, the contemporary
diet
 that we consume has more detrimental impacts
to
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on
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 our
body
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bodies
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 compared to
old
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the old
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diet
. So I could recommend
to cook
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cooking
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 by
ourself
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ourselves
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 to reduce the effect of harmful
chemicals
 and to live a safe and happy life.
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