Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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volunteering in charitable work something good
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that young youth can
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as well? In the essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusions. In terms of
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teenagers should
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negatively affects them and may be caused depression so charitable work helps to relax and feel satisfied.
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work and it is good to learn
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with adults and knowledge good things and ideas,make friends as well,
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poor people and kids, in my opinion, the high schools Allocate a day of the week with organisers to ask the students how want a volunteer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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