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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons ehy somrone should learn a foreign language Discuss both these views and give your own opini

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well mental health. On the one hand, many
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 that
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 not your mother tongue will help you keep your mental balance. To illustrate, the University of Texas
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 because there
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