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3)Topic -Task 1 -Informal One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new business. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Give your opinion of your friend's business idea Tell him whether or not you have decided to accept the offer Explain your reasons for this decision Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mark,

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Dear Mark, I hope you’re doing well! I wanted to express my gratitude for offering me the chance to join your new business. It’s truly an
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 that you considered me as a partner, and I’m genuinely excited about embarking on
this
 journey with you. Ever since we graduated, I’ve been eager to establish something meaningful in the tech industry. You know how passionate I am about innovation and technology. So, when I read your proposal, I was immediately drawn to the concept of launching an information technology startup. Given the current surge in demand for tech-driven solutions, I believe
this
 venture has tremendous potential.
Furthermore
, the rapid advancements in technology are revolutionizing how people work and live, creating an ideal environment for us to contribute something impactful. I’m confident that with our combined skills in marketing, sales, and development, we can make
this
 business thrive. Please let me know the next steps so I can prepare a detailed marketing strategy for us to review together. Looking forward to our exciting new venture. Warm regards, Parthvi
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task achievement
Try to state your decision more clearly and whether you have decided to accept the offer or not. This may help your response be more complete.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea or theme to improve coherence and make your argument more compelling.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is suitable for an informal letter to a friend.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are well-used, adding personal touch and coherence to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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