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The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

#internet
The
internet
 showed up many years ago, when
the
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computers had the
pentium
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system
sistem
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system
, but the
internet
 was really bad and slow. Every year, the
internet
 was getting better. The big companies were creating new alternatives to
internet
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the internet
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. The velocity of the
internet
 is father every
time
. Before, it was 1G, but now the
internet
 is 5G,
that
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 want to say people can watch videos in
real
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time
,
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 as if they would be in the place where is happening the video. The velocity allows us
talk
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 with friends or relatives anytime and anywhere in the world. The
internet
 is used to
work
 too, is really easy
work
 since the house, people can
work
 to
a
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extranger
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stranger
 country in the world, and that helps
they
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them
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 in their economy. With the
internet
, people can send a project or a design to their boss. If we use the
internet
 to
work
 or talk with friends or relatives, the
internet
 is
goog
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good
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. But if we use the
internet
 to play or lose
time
,
then
 the
internet
 is bad.
Finally
,
although
 the
internet
 helps in many
thing
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things
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, it is used to damage and lose
time
.
Therefore
, the
internet
 did not make
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society
ociety
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society
 better.
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