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Some people claim that there are more disadvandages of car ownership than advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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 type of
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 used by mankind was the non-motorised which was pulled by the horse.
Car
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ownership
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 back
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 was a luxury and only the wealthy with heavy pockets could afford a private
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. In the late 1700s, the industrial revolution in America replaced horse-pulled horse-pulled vehicles with machine-fueled vehicles. Due to improvements in management style and advancements in technology, it was made possible to mass produce the
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 at a fraction of the cost as compared to its predecessors.
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, fuel costs on the cheaper side made it obvious to switch to motorised
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 compared to traditional
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. In the early 1980s entry of Japanese ,
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 makers made
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 much cheaper.
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, an influx in high
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demand
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 made a drastic
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 for fuel causing its price to hike from 20% to 30% in the summer of 1985. Economists do not favour
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 high
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 for
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, as America is highly dependent on fuel exports and would not simply suffice on its domestic production.
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, high
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demand
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 will increase road traffic,
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 government will be needing to construct new
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 infrastructure causing it to bleed its federal reserves and issue bonds to deal with
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demand
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. Advantages of
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ownership
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 are owner's privacy, under-dependence on slow public
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, better logistics and supply chain of goods & commodities transportation etc. Through ease of owning personal cars, lots of small and local businesses have benefitted as lots of transaction takes place through the transportation of goods and materials in a certain American locality.
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,
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ownership
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 among women is on the rise these days due to the privacy which gives along with a sense of pride in being a
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 owner. Disadvantages of
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ownership
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 are pollution caused by burning
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, excessive road traffic, road and pedestrian accidents etc. Unlike Asian countries, where cars are manufactured per
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 consumption taken into consideration, in America, the automobile is manufactured as per the power it produces.
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 helps businesses to
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 their goods, the greenhouse
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 it produces is detrimental to our environment.
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, an average American releases more greenhouse
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 when compared to an Asian. The construction of new infrastructures, managing the traffic through the regulatory bodies and deaths due to roadway traffic-related accidents are causing a burden to the nation.
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 it is safe to say that
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-
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 disadvantages outweigh its advantages.
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