The growth of online shopping will one-day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or dis agree?
It is considered that
increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
of
popularity online buying clothes, goods could be Change preposition
apply
reason
of shopping centres fall in Add an article
the reason
a reason
megapolisies
and towns. I completely agree with Correct your spelling
megapolises
megalopolises
this
opinion and think that after Covid-19 majority of human beings does
not use traditional purchases.
Correct subject-verb agreement
do
Firstly
, from my point of view people, who already used online shopping are
think purchasing remotely is Unnecessary verb
apply
big
saving of time and keeping energy. Nowadays, the greater part of human beings in big cities are workers, and there is no additional day offs except Add an article
a big
saturday
and Change the capitalization
Saturday
sunday
. So, traditional shopping requires almost one whole day. Change the capitalization
Sunday
For example
, it is really better spend
maximum Add the particle
to spend
twenty
minutes Change preposition
of twenty
for
choosing and ordering what you want so Change preposition
apply
rest
of Correct article usage
the rest
free
time spend useful, like going out to nature with Correct pronoun usage
your free
family
, Correct pronoun usage
your family
make
time for yourself and so on. That's why It is more popular Wrong verb form
making
using
remote functions of life.
Change the verb form
to use
Secondly
, large
Add an article
a large
the large
crowd
of people will lead to Fix the agreement mistake
crowds
Correct article usage
an increasing
increasing
sickness Replace the word
increased
rate
because of viruses, which Fix the agreement mistake
rates
are provides
Change the verb form
provide
humans
. In Change preposition
by humans
21st
century getting sick does not Change the article
the 21st
requires
a lot of things. BecauseChange the verb form
require
,
most of us lives related with Remove the comma
apply
socium
. Correct your spelling
social
For example
, in
Change preposition
during
Coronavirus
period there was Correct article usage
the Coronavirus
Correct article usage
a rapidly
rapidly
increase Change the word
rapid
of
sickness throw people, who were in crowded places.
To conclude, I am always for online shopping, but in the Change preposition
in
future
I strongly believe that Add a comma
,future
in
shopping centres will be something Change preposition
apply
Correct your spelling
much
musch
more interesting than Correct your spelling
much
clothings
and goods.Change the wording
clothing
items of clothing
articles of clothing
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite