The growth of online shopping will one-day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or dis agree?

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It is considered that
increasing
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the increasing
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of
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popularity online buying clothes, goods could be
reason
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the reason
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of shopping centres fall in
megapolisies
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megapolises
megalopolises
and towns. I completely agree with
this
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opinion and think that after Covid-19 majority of human beings
does
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not use traditional purchases.
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, from my point of view people, who already used online shopping
are
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think purchasing remotely is
big
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saving of time and keeping energy. Nowadays, the greater part of human beings in big cities are workers, and there is no additional day offs except
saturday
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and
sunday
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. So, traditional shopping requires almost one whole day.
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, it is really better
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maximum
twenty
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of twenty
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minutes
for
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choosing and ordering what you want so
rest
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the rest
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of
free
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your free
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time spend useful, like going out to nature with
family
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your family
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,
make
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time for yourself and so on. That's why It is more popular
using
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remote functions of life.
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,
large
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a large
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crowd
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crowds
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of people will lead to
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an increasing
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increasing
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increased
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sickness
rate
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rates
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because of viruses, which
are provides
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humans
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by humans
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. In
21st
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the 21st
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century getting sick does not
requires
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require
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a lot of things. Because
,
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apply
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most of us lives related with
socium
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social
.
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,
in
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during
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Coronavirus
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the Coronavirus
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period there was
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a rapidly
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rapidly
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rapid
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increase
of
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in
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sickness throw people, who were in crowded places. To conclude, I am always for online shopping, but in the
future
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I strongly believe that
in
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apply
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shopping centres will be something
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much
musch
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much
more interesting than
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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and goods.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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