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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#technology #world
Nowadays,
plethora
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 of environmental problems
are
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 faced by the world
such
 as deforestation ,pollution ,the greenhouse effect and the depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer .
However
, it is commonly believed that
,
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with the latest advent of technology it can be solved . I totally agree with the statement and my inclination
are
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 explained in trailed paragraphs .
To begin
 with,
latest
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 inventions
such
 as computers and electronic gadgets have already started to save the earth.To be specific , the increased
use
 of these devices reduced the
use
 of paper,which eventually started
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discourage
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 deforestation
. .
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Further
, with the increase in technology people are more aware
about
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 the deleterious effect of human activities
such
 as carbon
emission
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emissions
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 to the
environment
 .
Thus
such
 activities can be reduced .
For example
,
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 can
use
 social media to spread awareness among people .
Therefore
,they will be aware and we can reduce the harmful effects
to
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 the
environment
 .
Moreover
 ,the biggest enemy of
environment
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the environment
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 is the effect of harmful gases from
non -renewable
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non-renewable
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 fuels.Scientists have already invented alternatives for
such
 resources by introducing the world
the
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 power of renewable energy,nuclear energy and electricity .
For instance
,the
world famous
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 automobile company
the
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apply
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Tesla has introduced a new car model which can be run
by
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on
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 electricity.Though
,
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this
 car is not yet ready for
the
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public
use
 , the company has promised that it will be soon available to
public
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the public
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 . To conclude,
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even though
eventhough
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even though
 the future is unpredictable, the latest inventions of science make us
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that ,
it
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 will surely help the
environment
 in the near future
..
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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