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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Do you agree or agree?

#people #choices
The general public or man say in
this
 modern
world
 we have a
lot
 of opportunities in our
life
. I totally agree with
this
 opinion due to the reasons that will be discussed in the following paragraphs. At
this
 time
people
 have a
lot
 of choices because our
world
 is modernized and global and it is gradually going to progress. In the past,
people
 could not go to other countries easily for work and study or other options. Now a huge number of nations can travel or immigrate to other countries and start their own
life
however
 they want or go for travel and see new countries.
Furthermore
, at
this
 time the internet is invented and up to date and it performs a key role in our
life
 . It debates that everything is modified in comparison with the past because
people
 can communicate with each other easily and get a
lot
 of new options and information for choosing and applying in their
life
.
In addition
,
for example
 in the past women could not choose about their
life
 and they did not have any choices about studying, working, etc. and their father or husband decided for them or their duty was marriage, having children, cooking, cleaning, etc. But now they have choices to do what they want to do and we have a
lot
 of successful women in
this
 modern
world
 who can go to space or be athletes and get several models in sports so it implied that in
this
 modern
world
 women can choose by themselves. To sum up, as I explained in the previous paragraphs I totally agree with the opinion that
people
 both male and female can choose their own
life
 and decide whatever they want but
that is
 for nowadays not the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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