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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there has been much discussion and research on whether
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 setting is a good way to go about business matters, i. e., meetings, discussions and training. Some people tend to believe that meetings online help boost productivity, while others think that they demotivate employees.
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 efficient. Attendees can join the discussion from places they are most comfortable in, and they do not need to spend
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 commuting to an office. That way the
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 saved can be spent on other duties, and it helps reduce
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 overtime. It leads to a better atmosphere among the employees, as they feel more flexible and happier in the workplace.
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, it is more difficult to keep focused on the discussed matter while sitting in front of a computer. According to scientists, countless people find it difficult not to do other things while in a meeting online (
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 social media, read a newspaper or even cook).
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 can lead a person to be uninterested and uninformed of what is happening at
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, meaning the efficiency, quality of
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 and motivation reduces. In conclusion, the underlying benefit of
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 efficiency, which helps the workplace to appear more flexible.
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distractions while communicating from another place can drop the quality of
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. I am personally fond of the opinion that telecommunication has got more pros than cons, as it lets a person feel
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 and more responsible.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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