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Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A great number of people advocate that
school
uniforms
 are not necessary and they should be removed
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I agree with
this
 statement completely since the uniform forces students to think that, they all should be identical in every way
such
 as grades or skills which is not accurate and the
uniforms
 might be expensive for some families as well.
Firstly
,in our contemporary world, so many people believe that
uniforms
 are old-fashioned because the whole idea about
uniforms
 is forcing the pupils to wear the exact same clothes at
school
 by rules but forcing them would create some unwished outcomes.
For instance
, the students might think that being different is forbidden so they all have to be talented in the same subjects
such
 as art or gym.
As a result
, the
uniforms
 are limited
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their freedom to think differently or to wear whatever they desire to express themselves in the very
first
 place which they should be free
.
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Secondly
, the mandatory clothes for institutions might be hard to afford for some poor families when we consider the other
school
 expenses they have to do
such
 as notebooks and books and some parents are having trouble providing them as well.
Thus
, the money which is spent to buy
uniforms
 is not reasonable and the old rules of schools should be changed in order to give a chance to families who live in poverty to spend that money on other materials
instead
 of
uniforms
. To conclude, a vast quantity of people believe that,
uniforms
 are not needed anymore and they should be banned from the
school
 legislation
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I agree with
this
 idea because from my point of view, they are giving wrong impressions to students and they are
also
 expensive for
such
 unnecessary clothes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • unnecessary
  • banned
  • promotes
  • equality
  • peer pressure
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • pride
  • prepares
  • future
  • maintain
  • discipline
  • order
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