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. The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Life is like a piece of
music
. It depicts
people
's life stories, struggles, successes, and dreams. It helps reduce
people
's stress in various ways.
Music
 has different genres and rhythms, and its goal is to entertain and inspire
people
.
Music
 writer and singer put their hearts and soul into their craft in order to entertain
people
. They jive it with different genres and rhythms depending on the lyrics they have created and how they going to portray the mood and emotions of the
songs
. It could be about love, breakups, happy thoughts, hopes, dreams, faith, and party mood.
This
 genre could be pop, ballads, hip-hop, rap, and many more. Like the
songs
 of Dua Lupa, Britney Spears, Ed Sheeran, and other well-known and top-rating albums which can make your body groove and dance every time you hear them. There are
also
 kinds of
music
 that give
people
 inspiration to keep going and be resilient.
Music
 that will touch your heart and will help you see things positively. Like kinds of
music
 about Christian
songs
. The beat, the rhythm, and the lyrics make you feel loved and blessed.
Songs
 of the Hillsongs, Sarah Geronimo, Jaimie Rivera, Celine Dion, and many more, once hearing them
make
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makes
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 stress fade away. Even listening to the calm instrumental beat of a musical instrument, the voices of animals in the forest, and the flow of the water in the river help your mind at peace. Indeed
music
 entertains and inspires
people
. It is an instrument to relieve
people
 from stress. It makes your body move and makes somebody happy. Sometimes it
also
 someone's company when they're alone.
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