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Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college to describe your situation, your problems when you are sharing room with another student, say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to share the problems I am facing when sharing a
room
 with Lisa, my classmate. There are a lot of
noises
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noise
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, dust and people
come
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coming
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to
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into
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 our
room
 without any discipline. I find it difficult to clean
on
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apply
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myself and find private time and
silent
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a silent
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room
 to study. Yesterday Lisa just came back at
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midnight
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mid night
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midnight
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 with her friend
then
 I cannot sleep while I have a test tomorrow. The other days, she played guitar and rock music while I was studying Philosophy. She
also
 does not clean up the
room
 but only
spend
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 time
for
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playing
guitar
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 and
put
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 her stuff all over the ground. I want to suggest
a
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guidance from
college
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the college
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 for late coming back to
college
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the college
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 dormitory and restriction on
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the numbers
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numbers
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 of friends invited to the
room
. There should be
also
a
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apply
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guidance
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guide
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on
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for
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 each student in the
room
 to do clean duty on
weekly
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a weekly
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 timeline. Best regards, Hang
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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