Some people think that parents should be punished if their children commit crimes because they are responsible for their children's actions To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A proportion of the public believes that
parents
should take responsibility for their children's criminal actions and that they must be punished as a result
. I agree with this
statement that is
because criminals, commit crimes because they can't
recognize what is right or what is wrong Correct your spelling
except for
exceptfor
a population of criminals who had Correct your spelling
except for
a mental disorders
, but for these groups, Correct the article-noun agreement
a mental disorder
mental disorders
parents
should understood
that their juveniles' had broken mental health.
Civilization was created by people from the Change the verb form
understand
first
known centuries and in present days human beings need to be educated for being adapted to modern life and
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apply
thus
teachings start from the first
hour after they are born. As an ancestor, parents
must teach life basics to their Correct your spelling
juvenile
juvinile
and these life basics are walking, speaking, eating, protecting from dangers and even include having good habits. Children who don'Correct your spelling
juveniles
t
know what is wrong, tend to commit crimes as soon as they are able,considering their irrepressible urge which comes from animal impulse
. For example, the serial killer Jeffry Dahmer grew up in a careless family and he thinks thatFix the agreement mistake
impulses
,
killing a man in order to make love is a normal habit so he started to kill at an early age.
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apply
Moreover
, some people commit crimes because they are impulsive because from
their mental disorder and their brain can'Change preposition
of
t
work as an average human brain. Some of them hear noises inside their
had ordering them to kill or feel excited about killing Replace the word
there
such
as mentioned killer Mr Dahmer. Considering that, he might be suffering from a mental disorder and he told this
in his inquiry, what he feels while he was killing, but we can't
know if it is true or not because the judge from his case decided to turn his brain into ashes before examination considering his dirty legacy. Furthermore
, if his mother and father had a quality connection with him during his childhood years, they could have understood what's
wrong with him deep inside, and they could take action to solve his problems as a precaution.
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parents
not only must teach their juvenile
what is good or bad but Fix the agreement mistake
juveniles
also
they must observe their kids to solve their bad habits or impulses problems to create a nice participant in society from stretch
.Add an article
the stretch
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