Some people think that parents should be punished if their children commit crimes because they are responsible for their children's actions To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A proportion of the public believes that
parents
should take responsibility for their children's criminal actions and that they must be punished
as a result
. I agree with
this
statement
that is
because criminals, commit crimes because they can'
t
recognize what is right or what is wrong
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except for
exceptfor
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except for
a population of criminals who had
a mental disorders
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, but for these groups,
parents
should
understood
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that their juveniles' had broken mental health. Civilization was created by people from the
first
known centuries and in present days human beings need to be educated for being adapted to modern life
and
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thus
teachings start from the
first
hour after they are born. As an ancestor,
parents
must teach life basics to their
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juvenile
juvinile
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juveniles
and these life basics are walking, speaking, eating, protecting from dangers and even include having good habits. Children who don'
t
know what is wrong, tend to commit crimes as soon as they are able,considering their irrepressible urge which comes from animal
impulse
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. For example, the serial killer Jeffry Dahmer grew up in a careless family and he thinks that
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killing a man in order to make love is a normal habit so he started to kill at an early age.
Moreover
, some people commit crimes because they are impulsive because
from
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their mental disorder and their brain can'
t
work as an average human brain. Some of them hear noises inside
their
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had ordering them to kill or feel excited about killing
such
as mentioned killer Mr Dahmer. Considering that, he might be suffering from a mental disorder and he told
this
in his inquiry, what he feels while he was killing, but we can'
t
know if it is true or not because the judge from his case decided to turn his brain into ashes before examination considering his dirty legacy.
Furthermore
, if his mother and father had a quality connection with him during his childhood years, they could have understood
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wrong with him deep inside, and they could take action to solve his problems as a precaution. To sum up,
parents
not only must teach their
juvenile
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what is good or bad but
also
they must observe their kids to solve their bad habits or impulses problems to create a nice participant in society from
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parental responsibility
  • Upbringing
  • Influence
  • Accountability
  • Ethically justifiable
  • Legal ramifications
  • Systemic issues
  • Community programs
  • Personal choice
  • Peer influence
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