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Some people think that radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. What is your opinion?

Certain individuals around the world believe that Televisions are less attractive
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people
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 because they enjoy and practice more
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radio
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 compared to
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. The impending essay will discuss my point of view about
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 statement with a logical conclusion. There are
mulitiple
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 reasons why televisions are the main source of fun. To start with, almost all screen players are
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visible
visiable
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visible
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audio
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 which in turn
contribute
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 to
people
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 watching the content and enjoy from it.
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 feeling
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 the viewers. The Times has announced that due to a survey in 2022 almost 88% of
people
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 chose
tv
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instead
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radio
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 in Toronto, Canada. While it is true that some listeners
also
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radio
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the radio
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 but it is true that it does not have
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 to look at it. One of the other main advantages of flat screens is decoration.
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 the globe utilize televisions for home decoration
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 to a significant impact
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 house value.
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, it gathers
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 because members of families sit together and enjoy
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programs.
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, due to
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expenses
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expences
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 of life, a vast majority of
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 are not able to buy concerts ticket but they can watch
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 live
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tv
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.
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,
radio
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 is
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available
availible
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available
in
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every where
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 but vision
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screens
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 are better. In conclusion, few individuals argue that
people
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 can have more fun with
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radio
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the radio
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instead
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 of
tv
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 but from my point of view, watching the programs and using
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decoration is more
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convenient
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convenient
 for
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residents
president

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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