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Some people think that radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. What is your opinion?

#people #radio #tv
Certain individuals around the world believe that Televisions are less attractive to
people
 because they enjoy and practice more
radio
 compared to
Tv
. The impending essay will discuss my point of view about
this
 statement with a logical conclusion. There are multiple reasons why televisions are the main source of fun. To start with, almost all screen players are visible and
audio
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 which in turn contributes to
people
 watching the content and enjoy from it.
As a result
, it gives
significant
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 feeling
for
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 the viewers. The Times has announced that due to a survey in 2022 almost 88% of
people
 chose
tv
instead
 of
radio
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the radio
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 in Toronto, Canada. While it is true that some listeners
also
 enjoy from
radio
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the radio
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 but it is true that it does not have
screen
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a screen
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 to look at it. One of the other main advantages of flat screens is decoration.
To begin
 with, an increasing number of residents
in
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 the globe utilize televisions for home decoration
this
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 may
leads
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 to a significant impact
in
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 house value.
Additionally
, it gathers
people
 because members of families sit together and enjoy
from
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programs.
For instance
, due to
high
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expenses
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expences
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expenses
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 of life, a vast majority of
people
 are not able to buy concerts ticket but they can watch
it
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them
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 live
from
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on
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tv
.
However
,
radio
 is
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available
availible
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available
in
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everywhere
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every where
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everywhere
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 but vision
screen
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screens
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 are better. In conclusion, few individuals argue that
people
 can have more fun with
radio
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the radio
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instead
 of
tv
 but from my point of view, watching the programs and using
for
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it for
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the
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decoration is more
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convenient
convenien
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convenient
 for
residenst
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residents
president
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