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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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Most public understand the importance of maintaining a healthy
diet
 ,yet many still lead to unhealthy
food
 habits.Maintaining a nutritional
diet
 is very important to lead a hale and healthy life which many people forget and
this
 is a huge problem.
This
 essay will discuss why the public avoids healthy
food
 and how they could be encouraged to follow a healthy goodie more often . The reason why people not following a healthy
diet
 are plentiful;one of them is lack of
time
 .For individuals working long hours, finding
time
 for cooking is a challenge .When people get
time
 after long working hours , they prefer to go to restaurants with their friends to eat out . Many spend their leisure
time
 on social media for hours and
as a
result
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 they do not get
time
 to cook their
food
 .Individuals must manage their
time
then
 they can cook healthy meals at least a few days a week. Another reason may be a scarcity of organic foodstuff and its price.Most of the countries are importing their vegetables and fruits ,
thus
 the price will be obviously high for the common society to afford it .To help with the cost , the government should encourage organic farming and terrace gardening among their nationals by giving subsidies to the farmers .
Thus
 residents are encouraged to consume healthy feed within their budget . To sum up, the public is not maintaining a healthy
diet
 due to various reasons ,including lack of
time
 and money .By encouraging them by providing reasonably priced healthy
food
 and managing their
time
 by themselves , they can become healthier and fitter.
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