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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Recently, there have been arguments that the measurement of
intelligence
 is through the
people
's experience of who has to succeed or not. Whereas, some
people
 believe that there are other
ways
 to
measure
 it. Needless to say, it is impossible to accept the
person
 who is intelligent only succeeded or not because of two reasons which I will write about.
Firstly
, in terms of the criteria of the
person
 who whether a successful
person
 or not, it is hard to judge them because
people
 totally have different criteria. To illustrate, some
people
 wonder if reaching their own achievement will be fulfilled without any audience statements
such
 as doing housework harder every day which is a kind of own fulfilment thing. Meanwhile, others think it would not succeed if others will not accept it, for, example whether success biggest Business or not.
Therefore
, it is far from
intelligence
 or not as for the
people
 who succeeded or not.
Secondly
, as a mersurementing of
intelligence
 ,things there are some exams to
measure
 your own IQ and how many
intelligence
 rates you have. So, does not matter whether
people
 have succeeded or not when you
measure
 your IQ is present. It is already established other
ways
 to
measure
intelligence
 rates in modern society.
Thus
,
people
 already knew what is the best
measure
 of human
intelligence
ways
. In conclusion, regarding the
intelligence
 that
people
 understand via the
person
 used to success or not while others said there are other
ways
.
As a result
, there is an exam in which is possible to
measure
 it unnecessary other
people
's judgments.
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